Death

• Artist: multfangirl18587
• Description: death
• Date: 01/17/2009
• Tags: death

As I watch this trapped soul leave his body
His soul drifts to the heavens
He silently screams begging for more time
He lets silent tears fall down his face
The tears fall to earth creating rain
His body is taken away
He watchs silently as they carry his body off
He reaches heavens door and is welcomed warmly
As I watch this trapped soul leave his body
His soul drifts to the heavens

Comments

[Kristy1358]

sad sad but good 4/5

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[alitress]

A bit too much of free versing. 3/5

[stephie_moon]

...hmm, im kinda confused but i like it

[RisexWithxthexDead]

That's really sad but good...no grammar or spelling mistakes. Good Job biggrin