Colorful

• Artist: Kunagi Tenrou
• Description: I did this poem for a class project and I liked the way it came out. So i just want some more feedback on it.
• Date: 01/17/2009
• Tags: colorful project bright light

You're so colorful
so bright and light
I'm do dark
so damp and shadowed

You stand out
Your color stands so bright
You blind my darkened eyes

How do you stay so,
so bright and so light
While I'm dark and damp?

Please, bright light
share your color with
me

Comments

[Master Grey-Snake]

good but now since every one wants to be dark its kinda lame

[stephie_moon]

wow wat a beautiful poem...its kinda romantic and softly so...i love it!!!

[Heller Krieger]

That's pretty good, I'd say 4/5