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Sloshing over your toes making you giggle with glee.
Taking any and every form.
Washing away your worries with comforting coolness and showing you the the things that are perfect in life.
Bringing life in a awing way
Water is a life force that will never fail thee.
- by Deaths Poet7 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/25/2009 |
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- Title: Water
- Artist: Deaths Poet7
- Description: This was a poem I wrote one day when I was Uber bored Plz Comment
- Date: 01/25/2009
- Tags: water
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- KitanaWolfblood - 04/27/2009
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Need to be organized a little bit better.
The poem and ideas were very good. I love the feeling it provoke when you read it. However, it needs more detail, more time... the word selection is poor, the lines are not stylized, the flow is very rough.
I sugest a rewrite with more thought and engery put into it. smile
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