Constant

• Artist: Deadlyemodragon
• Description: this is a poem i made about my life
• Date: 01/29/2009
• Tags: constant

Being in constant pain
I can never refrain
Inflicting upon myself
Degrading my health
There's always an emotion
Ready to cause an explosion
Can never get out
Makes me want to shout
So much pressure building up
Spilling over the cup
It's more than i can take
Always being called a fake
Always filled with anger
Just being a stranger
Everything causing pain
Is costantly causing strain
You don't know how i feel
I don't have nerves of steel
The pain never goes away
While you ask if im ok
It will never end
These wounds will never mend
My feelings never matter
All i can do is become sadder
Even though i care
All people can do is stare
This pain is real
This is how i feel

Comments

[Deadlyemodragon]

yes i know that part was a little difficult to tie together

[- It Gives Me Wings -]

You're lacking proper grammar, but the central idea is good. Some lines I could make instant revisions on, for example: All i can do is become sadder, changed to: All I do is become sadder. This would match the flow of the previous line, and although sadder sounds terrible, you are rhyming, so it must be. 3/5

[hellobeautiful793]

amazing!

[c00k1emonstar]

Its realy good. I can see how your feeling.