War

• Artist: x II D O P E Y II x
• Description: Sad Sad Sad War =[
• Date: 02/02/2009
• Tags: wars

WAR

War,
Will it ever go,
Will it ever stay,
We will never know,
It can go two different ways

War,
Cannons to the right,
Cannons to the left,
The enemies teeth will bite,
As the cry and be weft

War,
Will it ever go,
Will it ever stay,
We will never know,
It can go two different ways

War,
They struggle with fear,
But stand strong and proud,
With not one tear,
But yet shouting agony loud

War,
Will it ever go,
Will it ever stay,
We will never know,
It can go two different ways

Comments

[Xx_BunnyAlice_xX]

It repeats too much, try harder to succeed... If you want to see a good poem look at one that doesn't repeat, or have a title in common with every other poem out there...

[NakedJack]

Considering there are dozens of poems titled "War" and it doesn't really say much...........can't criticize your technique........I don't know, I think, its just not what I look for in poetry. I like deep, profound, meaningful. This is poetry for the sake of poetry. If you think its deep and meaningful, then I'm sorry for not trying hard enough to find how it is.