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I know you
The one I met before
That I fell for
That loves no more
I know you
From way back then
I remember when
It happened again
I know you
You were my friend
Until the end
But then again…
I know you
What has been told?
Fit the mold
Of young and old
I know you
Your name, it was…?
Or because
It often does
I know you
Stayed by my side
What a ride
But now I hide
I knew you
But drove you away
Wanted to stay
Hopeless anyway…
I knew you
Why did you change?
It was strange
Was within range
I knew you
You’re not the same
You share the name
But not the game
I knew you
I love you still
It was a thrill
But had to kill?
I knew you
Hope I still do
Know me too?
It isn’t true
I knew you
Remember what we had?
How we were glad?
Are you mad?
I forgot you
Can you forget me?
Can you see?
Only way to be free...
- by Aislene Drossel |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/26/2009 |
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- Title: Stranger?
- Artist: Aislene Drossel
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- Date: 02/26/2009
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Comments (4 Comments)
- twistedpersonality_0_0_ - 06/06/2009
- one word... AMAZING!
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- Senny Paine - 03/02/2009
- Towards the end of this poem it seems you didn't want to leave it like that so you just kinda... over ran it with things that didn't fit. Stanza5 - "Or Because", Stanza8, "Was within range", Stanza10, "But had to kill?", I don't understand why that is there. And Stanza11, "Hope I still do / Know me too?" Even if it is a poem, you need to show that you ended a thought. Punctuation is needed.
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- The God Bot 4000 - 03/02/2009
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Some of the verses don't really fit. And some of the rhyming seems forced in it, like all you did was rhyme words and put them together, without meaning.
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- Imo-san - 02/26/2009
- Yet again, you blow me away, man. <3
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