Betrayal

• Artist: Apocalyptican Dreamer
• Description: My teacher asked us to write a sonnet and this is mine...
• Date: 04/13/2009
• Tags: sonnet

I can not compare thee with something just
For you're the most vile and repulsive being
The only things that drives you is your lust
A lust to cheat those who are unseeing
No one can escape your bitter-sweet games
When they realize, they are in far too deep
And I still don't see how you're not ashamed
I still don't see how guilt doesn't haunt your sleep
The throbbing in my back is still emminent
From the searing pain of your betrayal
When will you learn that friends are not for rent
That they aren't something at your disposal
Ti'd very much like to see your demise
But for now I'll have to keep with despise

Comments

[Apocalyptican Dreamer]

I apologize for my earlier comment, it was my friend

[Chivalrous Erik]

That was an awkward comment. I think it's... it's from your heart.
You made this with feeling. 5/5 because nobody's perfect, but this is better.

[Cocoskitten]

Please, I can't stress enough about the importance of punctuation and how much it can bring a shine to your poem.