A Girl

• Artist: demonpudding
• Description: Again, I wrote this poem in 9th grade. ahah Not exactly the best year for me aha
• Date: 04/17/2009
• Tags: girl

She sits there watching,
admiring your work.
She loves you greatly,
but you’re such a jerk
To her you’re everything.
The earth, the moon the sun.
To you, she’s just a girl.
The forgotten one.
She wants to know you.
But you push her away.
Without looking back,
you just walk away.
She loves everything about you.
You hate everything about her.
Is there any hope for this broken heart?
Any chance for a cure?

Comments

[senribear]

I like it 5/5

[Cocoskitten]

The beginning is very powerful until it got to "The forgotten one." That line just wrecks the flow of the poem.
But other than that, 5/5!