Love Poems VI

• Artist: Cottoncandyocbra3
• Description:
• Date: 04/18/2009
• Tags: love poems

You need not beg or contemplate, rage or cry
I ask only you stay always by my side
Because I adore you, this is an obvious reality
My heart yearns for you to be with me
Through all the thorns that by which our coupling is hindered
And within mystic valley the path to open I've rendered
The points awarded don't have much importance with me.
I enjoy the time spent with you more than declaration of victory

Comments

[Casca 7]

This is really nice but is a bit cliche. Mainly the thorns are cliche. It also doesn't seem as fake as your usually happy poems feel which means you're actually starting to feel it or you've gotten better at pretending. ^_^ I would consider this a soft poem though. It doesn't really cause me to think of anything, which if you decide you want to write more like this you need to think of ways to make it more unique in order to leave a lasting impression. Overall 3.5 out of 5

[Faerie]

Aww so sweet and well put together ^ ^
Beautifully written!!