Recover...ing?

• Artist: xXVampire_RoseXx
• Description:
  I made this for a project in my english class for poems. I'm actually proud of it even if it's emoish and suicidal...btw for those of you who do have a problem with emo ppl. SCREW YOU. your here to judge my WRITING not ME. >.>
  If you want to judge me then PM me or comment but don't do it HERE.
  
• Date: 04/18/2009
• Tags: recovering

I’m so heartbroken inside
There is no cure, for my pain to subside
My only wish is to rid of my grievances
What are my chances
Of living a contented life
Without any strife?
Suicide seems painless
Life without you makes it worthless
My heart sings a sorrowful dirge
As my tears help me to purge
In my transient moment of lament
I no longer feel content
I grasp this knife
To take my life
Despite of fate
It is now too late

Comments

[iwillbeatharvestmoon64]

this is very good 5/5 and i also like the fact that your emo i think that emos can write really good especially you good work

[xXVampire_RoseXx]

ack! i didn't realize that, when i looked up rueful to double check its meaning I thought i saw sadness...well i just changed it now to sorrowful which is still just as good.
and thanks for your input n.n

[shawzie]

While "rueful dirge" fits your rhyme scheme very well im not sure what you are trying to say with that combination of words. Could be you are using a definition I'm not used to but doesn't it kind of mean 'regreatful funeral hymn'?

Anyhow. I liked it. And was not trying to judge, simply understand.

And I think 'Recover...ing?' might be an interesting title for your peice.

[xox_Cherry_Babe_xox]

I reckon its really good.
Its deep and meaningful and Its really gd.
It describes how i feel most days but i just hide how i feel and my wirting unleaashes how i feel.

And dw bout wat other people say.
Its seriously gd.
And i kinda like tha fact that your emo it makes you unique and special.