Blood Rose

• Artist: demon_of_cruelty
• Description: i made this poem one day (actually it took 3 days) when almost all the things happened to me. the words had just kinda spilled out of meh.
• Date: 05/21/2009
• Tags: blood rose

He walks on the path on what some would say
The worst possible day
His girlfriend was caught cheating
His brother took a big beating
His dog ran away
And has been gone for more than a day
The book of his life is starting to close
As he stumbles upon his first blood rose

As he thinks about ending it
Yet oddly finds a mitt
The book of his life is almost at a close
For inside the mitt is his second blood rose

He walks on the path
And decides to do the math
One more blood rose it’s over
Holding his pocketknife he falls
It piercing his heart
The book of his life is at a close
For in front of him lay the final blood rose

Comments

[Alectix]

The oddity of the "mitt" sort of throws me off...then again, it could indeed have a deeper meaning? Though, honestly it sounds as if you just thought of something? :] Iuno...I could be crazy ^^. If you're up to it, you might wanna check into the last couple of lines and help it flow with the rest of the poem...maybe you intended for this to happen though?

[Fantastic Nightmares]

I'm sure that the last thing you want is pity so um... I'll just give you my opinion: 10,000,000/5 + 3

[Phoenixalette]

really like it. [and sorry about ur gf and dog...]

[Kichou-Chan]

i love it... <3 !