The Exchange

• Artist: momo_hita
• Description: A sad poem.
• Date: 05/29/2009
• Tags: exchange

Into the dark
Went the girl
Into the night
She goes.
Her black dress flowing
Around her
Her dark eyes
Seeing nothing.
She goes to meet someone
A person of death
A creature of the night.
His name is Satan
And the girl
Is going
To sell him her soul.
See, she had a lover
Who was taken alive
By the devil.
So the devil told her
They could make an exchange
Her soul
For her lover's freedom.
Into the dark
Went the girl
Until she came upon the devil.
She sold him her soul, she did
And freed was her lover.
He was set free
A smile upon his face
But not her arms
Did he run into
But another woman's.
The girl was cheated....
So there she lies
In the gateway of
Satan's territory.

Comments

[XxBiBwiT_HaRexX]

i agree wit cory it repeated its self to much but i liked the ending

[MJgwarrocker66]

not bad.....4/5. The poem seems to flow pretty decently, but I lacks alot of image and feeling. I did feel the sadness and longing though. What really got me was the end when the lover was lost from the girls grasp. I actually have felt like that before. 4/5

[oh the children]

I know how that feels. </3

[Cory Crunk]

has no..... fluentcy