What Am I

• Artist: Goddess of Forces
• Description: Just how I feel....I know its short
• Date: 06/22/2009
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What am i without him
His smile, his laugh
I am alone in the darkness
Wandering until
I see him again
And then
He lights up my world

Comments

[bindyblueeyes]

you need to add more to this

i mean its okay

but im sure you could do much better

oh and ur beat is a little off. but don't worry about that its not to bad and most people have that problem as well

um... i think i'll give it a 4/5

hey can you check out my work as well?

[Spyceh]

It's a good start, but I feel you could go wayyy deeper with it smile If you add more feeling into it people will relate to it better. Which means they'll like it more smile