Jealous Minds Think Alike

• Artist: x-Asthenia-x
• Description: When the obsessive become possesive, love's a dangerous game to play...
  About jealousy, if you hadn't guessed. First entry! AAAH
  Critique is very welcomed on the grounds that it is constructive (although praise would be nice too!)
• Date: 06/27/2009
• Tags: jealousy

The perfect life; the perfect lie
A flash of green and you’re blind
The colour of death in the form of light
Reflect the monster’s eyes within

There’s another side, another side
Blank spaces between lines
What can you read? What’s there to find?
Always lurks under your skin

Nobody gets a Fourth Place medal
Nobody gets to have you like me

Comments

[Sunafire]

Arg, I clicked 'add' before I finished.
Anyway.
I love the last two lines especially because we as the readers don't know what it's in reference to, letting us have our own interpretation which is a must in a poem. If poems don't include this, then it puts me off completely which is why I love this!

Post more! I want to see more of your work.

[Sunafire]

I love the obsession/possession theme; it's a really interesting topic to explore and I love the way you presented it in this poem.

[AyyTown]

this is so good
i agree with panic

[x-Asthenia-x]

Thank you Panic smile
PLEASE COMMENT, NOT JUST RATE! (even a little comment will do; I want to know what you think)

[Panic Pirate]

I didn't know you wrote poetry too! biggrin
This is amazing; you should really build on your poetic talents.
It's succinct in a very effective way but maybe you could expand a bit more? ONly because I'd be interested to know what else you could do with this; it's very lyrical, actually smile Easily a song. 5/5