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(verus) Its like a happy... Ending. No more fighting no more pain i am gonna be your girl.. its like a happy... ending. there are good times there are bad times but we always get thorough it all.....
(bridge) its worth it all to be with you i am gonna love you foever....
(chorse) I need you in my life... i need you by my side... forever and ever i need you... when your around me i feel so alive and when your not feel like i wanna lay down and die... i need.. you......! heart heart heart
- by TomBoyChick101 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/02/2009 |
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- Title: I Need You
- Artist: TomBoyChick101
- Description: a song i wrote for some one very speical to me.
- Date: 07/02/2009
- Tags: lyrics
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- SilvertongueSagittarius - 07/05/2009
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first, put it in bar format, as in
Line1
Line2
Line3
second, a verse, a bridge, and a chorus a son doesnt not make. A song has more than one verse. Or if the verse repeats, than show that in your submission
third, it's rather weak. improve your vocabulary and take the more emo-esque lines out of it. Try doing more than one verse. And I do appreciate that love songs are harder to make sound good than songs of anguish, rage, and sorrow, but it is possible so keep workin at it! - Report As Spam
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