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• Artist: Shadowashes
• Description: A messy break-up suferer. I don't have ny usual long story to it.
• Date: 07/11/2009
• Tags: blank breakup

The moon replaces the sun
I fell like an empty shell
My head is clear of emotion
I'm all by myself
Everyplace is empty
Nothing comes to mind
And when I see you
I feel dead inside

Comments

[Saints Light Forever]

Vrry good. I actually kind of like the fact that instead of just out right saying your relationship had ended, u went deeper and really captured the readers interest in a poetic way. Good job.

[l Bell l]

Hmm at first before I read your description, I had no idea that it was a break up poem.
Maybe you should try to add in stuff that has to do with broken hearts, and heart ache.
That way unsmart people like me could really understand the feelings behind the poem.
Haha, anyways 3/5.

[purple monkeys in a train]

interesting =3