Death ...

• Artist: xxmynameisbxx
• Description: this poem doent really rhyme
  but its very meaningful and
  i hope you guys like it ...
• Date: 07/31/2009
• Tags: death life poetry

I see people who are afraid of death and it's outcomes.
Afraid of it's beauty and insignificant people walking toward its unevitable requests.
I understand death can be intimidating,
whether or not it can get to you,
or overwhelm you, consume you.
But the only thing that i see people more affraid of death,
is LIFE.

Comments

[AllToRuin]

Poetry is flexible to your needs. In this case, the message would be stronger in said poem had you used more powerful phrasing and at least proper spelling. Sorry I'm such a harsh critic, but I'm majoring in English and am trying to help you improve.

Unevitable is INevitable. I'm not sure inevitable was the word you were looking for in this poem.
IT'S is IT IS. ITS is possessive. In this case, yo

[Jikanu]

Nice poem, but the change of colors and increased font sizes kinda bugged me.

Nice work, though. i wrote a similar work, too. it's the one right under yours. check it out, if you're interested.