Walking

• Artist: FuriazFTW
• Description: Walking so far and long under the hot sun...
• Date: 09/21/2009
• Tags: walking politics government socialism debate

I used to think that life was perfect,
whispered on the western wind,
but that time I now can't remember;
a hermit on the road of life

Bloody feet, bloody feet,
pierced by my endless walking,
traversing roads abandoned, empty;
and you may think that I walk away,
but this is one game you don't want to play...

There's a hole that can't be filled with visions,
commercial ads, propaganda, government,
it's the part that yearns for freedom,
it's the only part of me that is legit

I need a medic or a psychiatrist,
'cuz those Progressives think I'm going crazy;
they're caging us in,
our own minds with bars of doubt.

Comments

[iAethereality]

I like the words being used but I think the flow could be better. The punctuation you use isn't needed in some places and when I say it outloud, it has pauses that can take away from a unique poem. Or else adding italics to bring out a word or influence imagery you provide. Good luck.