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Who am I to look at the night sky
In the darkest days of all time
And tell myself that I am a savior?
Who am I to dream of flying,
Beating back bad guys without even trying,
Correcting their unruly behaivor?
'Cause who needs a flaming sword when you have a pen?
Forget laser vision, I have vocabulary,
I can shoot syllables out of my palms,
I write the wrong, my head is strong.
My superhero identity is the Dreamer.
One who dreams.
I fill the holes in reality's ripped seams,
I repair reality's broken beams,
I grant hope by any necessary means,
My catchphrase is, "Believe."
A concept difficult for most to conceive,
My supersuit is made of 100% Egyptian Cotton Tees,
A pair of Levys, white tube socks, and worn out Nikes.
You won't know me when you see me,
You won't hear my name on the T.V.,
You won't see me flying between buildings,
And you won't see me firing lasers, of all things.
I'll be home, sitting in front of the laptop,
I write, write, write, and I don't plan to stop.
I take a break, and look at the night sky,
The news shows me the darkest days of all time,
I write the wrong, my head is strong,
Don't stop believing.
Dream on, people. Dream on.
- by Poetic Progression |
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- | Submitted on 11/28/2009 |
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- Title: Dreamer
- Artist: Poetic Progression
- Description: Man, I was having a case of writer's block the whole month. Comment and give me some constructive criticism, PLEASE. I really need something to work on. Here's something that I put together.
- Date: 11/28/2009
- Tags: dreamer
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Comments (2 Comments)
- AlreadyDead3152 - 11/30/2009
- This is pretty fantastic, if I do say so myself. Definitely my favorite poem I've ever read off of gaia, which is an awesome thing considering I've read some grade A poetry on here in my time. It's very Optimus Rhyme-esque, giving the illusion that the ordinary writer is extraordinary (just like they are if they're good enough). Anyway, I say 5/5. Great stuff.
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- all that i have - 11/28/2009
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The third and first half of the fifth stanza are really strong.
The rest is a little scattered, it seems like you feel confused.
You should try editing this, I feel like it could be a strong poem allover and not just in a couple parts.
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