the greatest adventure

• Artist: odd j davenport
• Description: ok so i wrote this poem and wondered if you liked it.
• Date: 06/04/2010
• Tags: greatest adventure

Love is an adventure
of the heart.
And with you,
I want the adventure to go on
forever and ever.

Comments

[Salornix]

This is more like a foot note you would find in a random facts book. No pizzazz or anything 2/5

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

I feel as if I have read this before... Try adding some similes, metaphors, hyperboles - some literary devices!
It lacks substance.