Just Let Go Of Me

• Artist: am dead wbu
• Description: Um, may not be as good, I was rushing this one along, tell me what you think anyways. ;D
• Date: 07/17/2010
• Tags: just

Farther apart
Closer to the heart
Is this the way its gotta be?
Let forever slow me down

I can feel myself drifting away
Feeling love tear me apart

There's nothing left of me
Just let go of me
I'm so sorry
I have met the perfect end
Just let go of me

I'm so cold
I'm already gone
Just turn around
And walk away
Turn your back on me

I can feel myself drifting away
Feeling love tear me apart

There's nothing left of me
Just let go of me
I'm so sorry
I have met the perfect end
Just let go of me

Heavens gates don't open
The angels sing careless words
God let me go
Wrapped in Heavens arms
I'm finally ready


There's nothing left of me
Just let go of me
I'm so sorry
I have met the perfect end
Just let go of me

Carry On Without Me

Comments

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You end with "me" too much. Try using a variety of structures. I couldn't really find a rhythm here, but this poem definitely shows potential.