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INTRO:
Well, I can still re-
-member the time! Of the blackened woe;
A world flooding with crime! And the old chateau
Still rests on the streets… I fall to my knees;
Look up the sky, as I start to plead!
CHORUS:
God, help me, I’m lost! And so now I beseech,
A light so far away, my mind could never reach.
Just give me a look at that golden beach,
A quick glimpse of Heaven; a glimpse of my mind!!
RISING BELIEF:
Set me free into the skies!
Let me purify my lies!
And flush all my hatred away!
Yeah, I can’t take this anymore!
I can’t find that holy door!
That links me to all my faith!
Oh, please, show me the way!
[CHORUS]
CLIMAX:
I found my center!
I found my life!
There is no more strife.
Never again;
Never will I,
Pull out that rusty knife!
TREMBLING DOWNFALL:
Now all my friends,
And all my kin;
I’ll beat this madness down,
Until the end.
I do not know,
Nor do I show;
That we will band together
Yet again!!
[CHORUS]
RESOLUTION:
At my wit’s end, I will not bow.
We have to win, but I’ve no clue how!
Overtake the evil, and follow the good;
Follow God, just like you should!
OUTRO:
Remember the time! Of the blackened woe;
A world flooding with crime! And the old chateau…
- by Skylerdsmith |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/20/2010 |
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- Title: The Old Chateau (Follow God)
- Artist: Skylerdsmith
- Description: A song I personally wrote, based on Christianity. If you have no faith in God, then you have no point in reading this. There's a rather complicated beat I have to it, as it varies depending on the section of the song.
- Date: 10/20/2010
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Skylerdsmith - 10/28/2010
- Thanks. This is the first song I've attempted writing, so... yeah. Your advice has been really appreciated. =)
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- Treasons - 10/24/2010
- Oh, I'm sorry! Please substitute the word "poem" with "Song, etc." Sorry.
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- Treasons - 10/24/2010
- I really like it and there's not much criticism, however, must I judge by any technical standards, I would change the stanza format which is OK, but, it could be much better. Mind you that my writing is also novice, however, some of your writing is incorrect. I somehow think that your better at writing narratives than poems. Don't let me discourage you. Work hard, labor's also virtue.
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- Skylerdsmith - 10/20/2010
- Feedback and constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated. I'm a young pioneer in literature and I'm always willing to acknowledge needed improvements.
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