Twisted

• Artist: pixiemoomoo
• Description: Not quite finished....but I thought I'd be some opinions :3nod:
  
• Date: 11/29/2010
• Tags: twisted

Sleepless nights thinking of you
Dreamless days I have to go through
Your face is plastered throughout my mind
I need you now, you must be mine
Your presence pleasures all my senses
When you pass me by, my body tenses
You're my current obsession, my twisted allure
My thoughts are cursed by that voice of yours

Comments

[pixiemoomoo]

thanks xD

oh yeah I know...hahaha it's not exactly finished...and I had writer's block xD

[Delightful_Indigo]

Your poem is short but I loved it. I caught my attention. Good job 5/5 btw that last line really doesn't go with the line before. XD

[pixiemoomoo]

thank you :] I was feeling iffy about that line too haha

[Miss Beckington]

I like all of it except the last line, which does not support the line before it. Excellent work so far! smile