Sweeping Sands

• Artist: Kittycquariana
• Description: The inspiration for this was a song called "Khallik Behalak/B'halak" by Carole Samaha. Comment and Rate, please!
• Date: 01/11/2011
• Tags: drifting desert breakup poem

The sands swept me away,
From that sad day.
On the sands wander I,
Free under the blue sky.

Visions of you
Painful but not new,
Appear in the simmering sun,
While I continue to run.

Our bond was tested,
My hope for you evaporated,
This baked earth sings of lament,
Saturated with tears of torment.

Still standing am I,
under this simmering sky.
Yet, you will never see,
Why I wished to flee.

Comments

[Joyote]

I loved it! Your really good at descriptions I can tell you that ^w^ But, the only thing I didn't like about it, was the fact that it somewhat not making too much sense to me... But you shouldn't listen to me, I have a brain sized of a pea so there you go X3

[greeneyed_alice91]

It was really good loved the images, makes me wish it was summer

[Cassadee-chan]

Very good! I'm not particularly fond of the rhyme scheme, but it was well done. 5/5!

[Nathan Galvan]

I very much enjoyed that. It's a good piece about a love that can never be. 5/5