Opitimus- chapter 1

• Artist: kittypuss123
• Description: this is my first story i hope you like it so plz rate it or add it to fav.!!! its about this gurl and she gets lost. but she finds this light... youll like it i think.
• Date: 07/28/2008
• Tags: danielleopitimus

chapter 1










"Danielle i said no!" boomed Danielle's father. they were in the middle of no were and nothing to
do."But dad, theres nothing to do in camp cant i explore?" Danielle complained.
"no I'm sorry sweetie but you might get lost"
"then what am i supposed to do?"
"read"
"i have no books" wined Danielle.
"oh just let her go Mike" her mom said.
"but darling... oh fine but don't go anywhere too far Okay?" her dad said in a winy voice.
"sure!" Danielle yelled just before she dissapeared into the darkness of the forest.

Danielle was born july 7th and shared her birth day with her mother.
Her sister- now in collage- was born june 28th and was a couple years older then Danielle.
Her and her family decided on her 18th birthday that they were going to explore the world. So
there they were in the middle of a big forest in Canada, were there wasn't a house or road within 10,000
miles from were they were.

"Ugh" Danielle said when a tree branch hit her face. She moved it aside, and heard something moving
in the bushes next to her. ' just a squirrel' she thought as she walked passed trying to ignore what ever
was in the bush. As she walked she started to look around and found out that she was seeing the same trees.
"oh no I'm lost!" sobbed Danielle as she stopped to sit down." Dads going to kill me".
She turned her head just enough to see a bright white light leaking between the trees.
She started walking towards it thinking that here might be a field. Danielle kept on walking and the
light got even brighter but there was never an opening. She walked on but the light never got closer, only brighter.
Danielle started to run. Suddenly something hit her across the head. Just before she backed out, she saw
the most gorgeous man she ever saw.

Comments

[lalaland2106]

it is really good, spelling can't always be perfect, and I think you should keep going with it.

[kittypuss123]

BUT THANK YOU FOR YOUR COMMENTING :]

[kittypuss123]

SCREW YOU ILL SPELL AS I WANT crying

[Lord Mega naruto]

OH DAMN THAT ALIAE ROSAE IT IS REALLY GOOD IT NEEDS SOME WORK WITH GOING THREW AND CAPITALIZING BUT WERE ONLY KIDS I SAY AND WELL I SAY IT IS AWEESOME LOL

[Sydd Rose]

Capitalization and spelling errors in the first few sentences. "no were" should be "nowhere" and "wined" should be "whined." After a sentence ends you need to capitalize the next word. The word I is always capitalized.