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A Vampire's Love
Chapter Two: The Luring Eyes
He kept staring at me, like he was looking into my sould. Then, he smiled at me. He then started to walk towards me. "Don't run. Don't worry. I'm not going to hurt you." He was now standing directly infront of me. "W..who are you?" I asked him. "My name is Alexander. And you must be Kayuki." I take a step backwards as soon as he said that. "How do you know my name?" "Kai, my cousin told me." "Oh, so you're Kai's cousin Alexander!" "Yes. I am. How old are you Kayuki?" "Eighteen." "So am I." "Why are you in the forest anyways?" I ask him. "This is one of my favorite places to relax." "Oh." Alexander was now very close tomy face. "Kai's right." "Huh?" "You are very beautiful." And then he kisses me. My eyes widen but....I couldn't pull away for some reason. "I'm sorry. I don't know what made me do that." He says looking away. I touch my lips, remembering the kiss. I had just got my first kiss from a Vampire! "For some reason, I feel like I can trust you with my very life." He says looking at me. "I want to tell you something." "Ok. What." "Kayuki, don't be afraid of me. I'm a Vampire."
- by sakura_1258 |
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- | Submitted on 10/26/2008 |
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- Title: A Vampire's Love Chapter Two
- Artist: sakura_1258
- Description: A Vampire's Love Chapter Two: The Luring Eyes
- Date: 10/26/2008
- Tags: vampires love chapter
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Gravetye - 02/17/2009
- Just kill me now. It's like reading Twilight on fastforward. With grammar issues. And even less originality than Meyer had.
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- Hanawie - 12/11/2008
- Watch your switching back and forth with tenses. And your grammar needs work. Also, vampire love stories are very over-done. Maybe try something original?
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- Fries And A Milkshake - 12/03/2008
- not as good as the first one
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- Fairest_of_the_Fallen - 11/30/2008
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damn! they move fast
lol XD - Report As Spam
- xXxPsychotic_VooDooxXx - 11/29/2008
- that was very interesting but i think u should work on grammer
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- violets_are_purple - 11/10/2008
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You might want to invest some time working on grammar, especially commas.
It also helps, when two characters are speaking, to put them in separate paragraphs. - Report As Spam
- sakura_1258 - 10/26/2008
- Yes. I know. I have read and I own all the Vampire Kisses stories. And it's kinda both. Like, she doesn't know currently but this is telling her life story so she knows.
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