The Broken Love Story

• Artist: iFuffie
• Description: Hope u like it!! :D
• Date: 12/07/2008
• Tags: broken story about love

One day Eliza comes back home and sees a letter that says: ''Bye! We wont be thogether anymore.. I finded another sweeter than u..Srry... and good luck to find another one!''Eliza starts to cry... Then takes a knife and wants to kill her self but... ''Knock! Knock! is anybody there?'' Eliza opens the door and says: '' Oh, grandma! what have u got there?'' Grandmother says: ''Sameone left those flowers for u but at my house..and it says its from...'' Eliza takes the flowers and reads from who the flowers are..''TOM!? THE GEEK!?!?!?!!!'' Grandmother says: ''yas''Grandmother leaves Eliza. Eliza waves to grandmother saying to her self: '' No matter ill kill him if he cant be whit me after all the thingsive have done to him..'' Eliza smiles and starts to cry alitle bit.She takes the knife and tries to kill her self again... But. Sameone Knocks at thr door.. Eliza opens the door finding noone is there.. She says: '' Hello is anybody there?''Then from samewere a sword was trown at her... but he misses her..Eliza closes the door fast. Sceared. And she didint want to kill her self anymore
To be continoue

Comments

[SilentTrouble]

you need to check your spelling and how you put the style of words down. It didn't really make much sense.

[Blind_in_a_day]

you REALLY need to work on your spelling.
Finded* is not a word.
It would go down to the next like if another person was speaking.
And if you're writing a story you have to use the real words. Like you* instead of u*.
Lol sameone and samewhere lawlz. It's some* not same*