- the war is vast we are doomed my last wish is that we win weve lost the battle but the war still goes on striking fear into people and hiding only to remember the lives taken i was the last one standing
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- Title: the last one standing
- Artist: aquaboy3000
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- Date: 01/27/2009
- Tags: last standing
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- aquaboy3000 - 05/11/2009
- its about the iraq war and i hate bush
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- I Burnt Your Poptarts v4 - 01/31/2009
- one word...BORING!
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- omnomNOM de Plume - 01/27/2009
- My first suggestion is punctuation. Commas, periods, and the like are your friends. Second I suggest you read Dover Beach. Just for fun. And third, try making it a little longer. Give us some detail. Who is the person speaking, and what are they fighting for?
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