Your my light.

• Artist: shadow_knight10
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• Date: 03/20/2009
• Tags: your light love struggle

I stood by you, fighting against odds that even a God would struggle with. My reasons alone were selfish once, to be done with this task and then be on my way.

Dark Beings and Light Lords, never would I have imagined this kind of tale even in a story book. Yet I see it, I see it happening past my own nose.

The struggles, the pain, I suffered enough to kill normal men and yet I'm here fighting a war that's not my own.

I should have died many times before, you didn't let that happen, not once. I'm here still fighting beings strong enough to kill armys, and yet your all I need.

We are at our end, the last slash of my blade and the last bit of your light was shun to finish the darkness.

But.................. you didn't tell me, you didn't tell me that was going to be your last breath you were going to take.

To save your palace................... you gave your life.

Why.......................... why. I carried your lifeless body down the silent hall and placed you where your mother lies now. Your glow is no longer around you...............

You didn't let me die. I'll do the same.

I'll set free what so hard we fought to seal, so you may live.

I'm returning the favor to you, because I'm still selfish, because I found something more precious then gold.

If we can fight it once, then their is still hope to kill it........................... But.......... not with out you ......................by my side.

Comments

[Clover_IceQueen]

The grammar could use some work, and the extra periods are not needed (you should only use three when you want a pause.)
I think this is an interesting excerpt, and I see real potential, but it doesn't really explain what is happening. It just sort of starts.
I know writing is not easy because I am a writer, myself. This shows real promise if you just change a few things smile

[Painted Wolfe]

I accidently clicked the writing arena instead of avatar, and when I did your short writing popped up. I was immediatly going to change but the first few words caught my attention. I have to say... it was really nice. No, more than nice. When I finished I was dissappointed that there wasn't more. The only critisism I have to say is I didn't like it when you used so many dots. But overall, fantastic.