The Boy Next Door

• Artist: popstar bubbles
• Description: 2 peopl first meeting and falling in love.
• Date: 09/07/2009
• Tags: next door

Once opon a time there was a girl named May Bell Liberty. may saw that a boy had just moved into the next door down. (so like nice people) may went next door and greeted John smith to the nieghbor hood. johns father and mother answered the door. (like normal parents would, micheal and elizebeth). micheal said " come in young one." so she did. may asked " who is sittting on the stairs? " they said " that is our son john smith."then may "said can we walk around the blok so i can show him around? " sure y not come on down here son and be nice." micheal said. hi, no i dont want to go."

Comments

[XxMystic_Love_018xX]

update??
=3

[toxic-tears-r-4evr]

its okay, but you need more description, u know? like, say how the people look and are dressed, how their voices sound, and just use more descriptive words. it was good and it made me want to keep reading but it was way too short. Good job though! keep it up!

[Wolf_heart14]

add more detail! plz, and make it longer. plz, for me? your bffl?

[invisibleninja159]

is there gona be another one or something?