the black dancer

• Artist: pom_pom_destruction
• Description:
• Date: 11/30/2008
• Tags: black dancer

i'm waring a black dress,and i dance,
listening to a sweet song that is yet so violent,
i listen to the hard echo,and my hair's straight,
my eyes are lined with black,my hairs over my
face,i listen to the words,how can you see thr-
ough my eyes like open doors it cries,i hear th-
e words wake me up inside and my ball-
et turns into steps of a puppet, my arms and
head fall, at the words save me the world feels
black

Comments

[BuckyKattLove]

Interesting format. You have a few typos and I don't think you break up a word that i one syllable even in a poem. It isn't a bad read.

[babymoth]

sweet.......................................................

[Acid Frenzy]

I hope you stop writing soon.

[francel_joy]

you're weird....

[Jeyrin]

I like it! 5/5