- we were runing a gun in our hand. it was a 9 milimator eye to eye with a shot gun in my face. the man didnt want to kill me i saw it in his eyes screaming.my friend jamie didnt want me to die so he ran in front of me. the man shot the gun.and killed jamie and i cried. i pulled out a gun and tried to shoot but the died body on me let him get away.
- by xxur dreamsxx |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 12/27/2009 |
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- Title: gone in an hour
- Artist: xxur dreamsxx
- Description: i lost my best friend in a gang war in an hour it was hard but i cant do anything about it 1. im 12 and 2.hes already gone in heaven i think. and u know who u are if u killed jamie i swear ill find u.
- Date: 12/27/2009
- Tags: death
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- xxur dreamsxx - 10/02/2011
- ya i wrote dis a while ago i know i need to proof read it
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- nightmare mew - 12/30/2009
- thts sad....
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- erotico mollete - 12/28/2009
- proof read, proof read, proof read. It has real potential, but the lack of capitalization, correct grammar, and use of wrong words [last line, died should be dead] takes away from the feel. Expand your vocabulary as well. You can definitely improve and I'm sure you will. 3/5
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