The Feeling's Mutual

• Artist: Angel Of Purified Light
• Description: I wrote this poem for a class. Give your full critiscism as well as you can. I want to try to improve my writing skills, so your thoughts would help me. Thank you.
• Date: 09/04/2009
• Tags: feelings mutual

Your first impression wasn't your best.
I could see you're not as pure.
So trust me when I say,
The feeling's mutual, I'm sure.

The second impression was the worst.
Someone now rides in a hearse.
You haven't found the cure,
So the feeling's mutual, I'm sure.

Third times the charm,
But don't push your luck.
For the feeling's only mutual.
And now you I can't trust.

Now i see the evil you bare.
You tried to turn my brain.
The feeling's now less than mutual,
Cause He didn't die in vain.

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[Angel Of Purified Light]

Again, if you can give some good critiscism, it would be much appreciated