The Wind and a breeze

• Artist: King Exseada
• Description: The wind compared to a breeze.
• Date: 08/14/2008
• Tags: wind breeze

A breeze is a tiny gust of air, blowing branches slightly
The wind is a powerful gust blowing trees right down
A breeze is a small gust of air, blowing snow flakes around
The wind is a mighty gust,creating a snow blizzard like no blizzard
A breeze is flowing through your hair,like a gentle wind
The wind is blowing you back so hard, you can't get there were ever there might be
where ever you will go the wind and the breeze you will not see
but you never know where ever it might be

Comments

[King Exseada]

this poem was kinda just a first atempt on arenas. I really don't care if it's not to good. I can't change the past.

[Fapkin]

Umm.. No offense, but I don't see the point of this poem.. >.< I mean, it's written well, but it's also pretty straightforward and boring. I agree with the person below me about the last line being confusing.. I can't seem to figure that line out. Also, you might try finding a synonym for the word gust, or at least structuring the lines at the beginning differently so they don't seem so repetitive. I'm sorry if any of this upsets you, but this is just what I think would help fix this poem. 2/5.

[Dancing Armadillo Mage]

it should be "though your hair" and the last line is confusing, I think a word might be missing. I like the idea behind it though.

[skeletoncookiegurl]

Sorry, but that stinks.