Go Back

• Artist: Lyra_655
• Description: I was feeling pretty bad since I had just been undiservingly mean yet again when I wrote this.
• Date: 09/13/2008
• Tags: back time change regret bullying

Why can't She go back in time and change the things She's done.
Why can't She go back in time and take back the things She's said.
There was a time when I was happy and free,
When hardship and pain meant nothing to me;
But now I've twisted and warrped and lost sight of what's right,
Become cruel and conceited and lost in the fight.
What happened to me
What changed in my past
What became of the girl who could make good things last.
She shifted and drifted and faded away
Until the day came when I heard someone say
"I hate you, I hate you!", these words to me were new
A part of me died and from the ashes She re-grew
Too late to atone, too soon to forget
She must live with the pain,the sorrow and regret.

Comments

[White Queen Asyet]

Very fluid and interesting! Probably my only criticism could be that many of the lines are different lengths, though the ones that rhyme seem to be the same length as their partners. Quite a good poem and I hope to read more from you some day.

[Online Violation]

It is a good poem, but the problem is that you're talking in two perspectives. "I and She" it's probably better to just pick one, or it seems you speak of more than one person. Other than that it's a well done poem.