Rain

• Artist: bInDa15
• Description: I wrote this in study hall cause I had nothing else to do. Hope you like it =)
• Date: 09/21/2008
• Tags: rain

I like walking in the rain, it hides my pain.
No one can tell I'm crying.
No one can call me insane.
I can walk for miles, all alone.
No one next to me, no one around.
The rain calms me.
It feels my sadness.
The rain lets me cry, without leaving my side.
One day, I'll be rain.
I'll be the one that helps someone.
I'll be there for them, whether they know it or feel it.
I'll stick around until they stop crying.
I won't let them down.

Comments

[WithinTheShaddows]

i like it... its easy to read- i cannot say that the metaphors are used to give the poem a whole new level it juss adds charicter. MAybe if you used more the poem could be easliy read on many levels- not just thge obvious on of wlking in the rain and finding someone who you can comfort or visversa. Maybe the rain could be your dreams crashing around you or the feeling that death taunts you but runs away down the storm drains...

sorry to go on

i like it ^^

[Sarah Kaye]

thats really good^^