helping hand

• Artist: nerdist11
• Description: sad
• Date: 10/25/2008
• Tags: helping hand

do not make me happy
do not make me glad
for with every good exspression
comes a tint of sad

if you see me frowning
please do not worry
for the frown im wearing
is really ment for me

if im feeling lonley
and i need a friend
please come sit beside me
and lend a helping hand
cry emo

Comments

[butterfly_bones13]

I like it. But do you honestly fell that way?

[nerdist11]

?

[Lilliana_Ki]

Nice work. But you could add some capitol letters and the title to the post. It looks much better this way in my opinion. But it's your choice.
The second stanze somehow needs some working:
Somehow it isn't as rhythmic as the rest and doesn't sound that good. Especially the "please do not worry" doesn't fit in the lingual melody. I only wanted to give you some advice. You have written a nice poem.

[nerdist11]

i did this once in the middle of the night ouut of random inspiration