beaten

• Artist: deathgod172
• Description: Beaten
  
• Date: 11/26/2008
• Tags: beaten

i am broken and beaten to the point where no unpromising comment will save me. my heart is filled with darkness witch fills my blood with hate as dark as the oil that swells my mind. i care not what it does to me i know now that there is hope and i will be released from its death grip it has on my soul. it eats away at me day by day and it is slowly killing my faith. i can't feel the severe embrass of the hate and anger i once felt it seems to have subsided and been consumed by the very darkness that spawned it. will someone help me.

Comments

[Ophelia Venom]

joan_kades, shut the ******** up.
You have no place to decide what suffering is.
Yeah, you're mom is dead. Yeah, it's sad.
Don't b***h about it, though.
You're just looking for attention.
Deathgod, I like this.
You have potential.

[deathgod172]

poetry does not have to ryhm or have a specific rythum all it has to do is have a effect on the reader and encourage a deeper style of thinking so no i will not post it somewhere else.

[senribear]

im sorry, but i believe it says poetry and lyrics. post this in the other writing contest and see how it goes there

[deathgod172]

well im sorry for you.

[joen_kades]

You don't know suffering... you didn't see your mother get murdered right in front of your eyes.. 1/5

[grimsunshine]

i like it and i can feel your pain ^_^
please read my poem and comment