Heart Like a Dart Board

• Artist: Sayurithemousey
• Description: A poem I came up with when I got hurt by a guy.
• Date: 12/17/2008
• Tags: heart like dart board

One's heart is so much like a dart board.
Rings deluding the player from the center core.

Each miss the player throws is another surge of pain.
As the blood drizzles down and your soul begins to drain.

Waiting for that single bullseye that would mean the end.
Making it so hard to love or trust again.

and as the shattered pieces will lay there.
No one seems don't even care.

For Love is just a game of waiting for that single dart.
That will forever destory your heart.

Comments

[purple_artemis00]

First of all check your grammar, capitalization and spelling. This is so messy it's hard to read. Also, the poem "tells" rather than "shows". Try to clear up abstractions.
However, I love your central image of heart=dartboard.

[selene_queen_of_a_lost]

wow that is soo like tru an i kno that pain all to well.....i understand i love the fact that u used one epic simile and how u compared the rings an heart i just love it in general!!!!!