Perfection

• Artist: TintedIce
• Description: I wrote this modeled after one of my friends, some of you may know who -.-
  
  It's a draft in progress, I would like people to tell me what needs to be shapened up.. because the last part is a bit confusing.
• Date: 01/08/2009
• Tags: perfection

Misshapen, cried, abhorred,
Something left on the cutting board,
I clean it up, I count to ten,
Perfection isn't what counts,
Perfection's just a friend.

I can stand by you,
Always being ignored,
I can stand alone,
Constantly being torn.
I can sit quietly,
Leaving no thoughts behind,
I can sit beside you,
With only you in my mind.

A shifting friendship,
Best, good, enemy,
I can say it's my fault,
And you can say it too.
But perfection is only a thought,
A thought I think of you,
But sadly I am no one,
But I can wait till you're done.
A person I was meant to be,
A person with perfection,
A perfection set free.

Comments

[RockStarBG]

It is a great one! I love the second paragraph. But if you think that there is something wrong in the poem you have to find it by yourself. Actually your friend, because shehe only knows what made her-him to feel things like that. What is "the perfection" is the question? It does not exist.

[Natsumi_Miyumi]

XD i feel so touched about this poem ahaha...kinda sad 2 me...5/5! biggrin