- I'm blind and theres no hope if you help there might be a chance but your not here so i'm LOST IN THE LIGHT darkness is a myth now only light shines down dreams can not be seen nothing to make things right because ...... WERE ALL LOST IN LIGHT no matter how strong you are unless you can rewright wrong were all lost.
- by leonhart a |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/15/2009 |
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- Title: lost in the light
- Artist: leonhart a
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- Date: 03/15/2009
- Tags: lightlost
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- Blackhawk Girl09 - 03/17/2009
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it's a good poem, but the way you have it makes it seem like one really long sentence.
break it up into stanzas and find some sort of rhythm to break it down into.
also, the WERE is spelled WE'RE
do you mean REWRIGHT as in to actually rewright something? or to make it from wrong to right?
you'll have to clarify that for me.
other than that, it's a good poem.
it just needs a little cleaning up
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