life

• Artist: belletbien
• Description: life.. what i think life is worth and not worth.. enjoy..and im new at this poem thing so give me a break if i spelled a couple of words wrong hey im only 12 lol turning 13 soon..give me a little break XP..[plz leave commets thank u
• Date: 03/23/2009
• Tags: life

life is worth it all at the end......life is worth every time in ur life...life isent just for games.or money or slavery. life is much more then all of that..life is worth time pain suffering of animals and other. how others or beatean half way of death cuz of there parents..life is much more then driving and getting things u want..life is worth all the time u have ...life is much more then ur boss telling u ur fired..life is worth ur hard work..it dosent matter if u got fierd cuz u no u did ur best..and if ur best wasent good...then try again..life is not worht. people making fun of people..cuz u mite not no WHAT they going therw at home. life is not worth. teachers being jude mental of there students.life is not worth.pain and suffering.life is worth ..greatness persinalltiy..life is worth love..not pain..life is worth happiness..every one deserves happyness.....life is wrth everything so plz dont go wrong bye doing somthing bad in life like somkin weed..judein people fighting people..cuz with everyones help...we can make this world this crapy world..a much sweeter kinder wolrd...a world i wanna leave in...

Comments

[Slinkenhofer]

Preachy preachy preach.
As a sadist, I find your message abhorrent.
As a person, I find your ideas naive.
As a writer, I find your poem unrefined and devoid of any structure that would make it "poetry." Take your personal manifesto to your journal, my dear.

[belletbien]

ok thnx for the tips biggrin

[Sunafire]

Hmm, maybe you should look at some other peoples poems, the layout etc, so you get a better idea of how to make yours good smile

But very moral.

[belletbien]

what u all think ?