dreams

• Artist: greenlover2452
• Description: Its a poem i wrote during a bad part of my life. its not that good because i didnt take my time to think about it. comment please! i need to know what i need to improve on
• Date: 03/29/2009
• Tags: dreams

I lay awake
in my bed
watching the shadows
dance around my head
the dolls they scream
as i dream
of Acid Rain

Comments

[Amarae Hoshisorano]

In all honesty your poem is absolutely amazing. I love the fact that it is short yet it holds alot of depth. If I were you I would not change a single word in your poem because it is a master piece within itself.