Perfection

• Artist: EscapingXMyXFate
• Description: I decided to write this because i felt like it was true in some respects.
• Date: 04/04/2009
• Tags: perfection hate

His hair was as blond as the sun was yellow.His smile was as bright as a full moon.His voice was smooth and silky.As if he was unwavered by emotions.His skin was perfect,unblemished,smooth and wonderfully tan.His body was one of a greek god.But his heart was as black as the night sky.He pulled women in with his painfully perfect voice and body.His teeth shone in the light show that he is not human and yet he is a vampire.He yearns for love but is destined to never find it and rome alone forever

Comments

[Raynai]

I agree that there are a lot of men out there who reel women in just to hurt them. Unfortunately, bad grammar and punctuation made your writing difficult to follow. A few extra minutes to put spaces where needed and check your spelling shows the reader how much pride you have in your work. Without it, someone might assume you don't take yourself seriously, even in the online world where most don't think such rules matter. Keep writing; you have a great talent for similes!