~Can't Live Without~

• Artist: WorIds
• Description: A poem I wrote about 15 minutes before I posted it.It's about a guy who was an arrogant cocky b*****d who thought I wouldn't be able to survive without him...hahaha now I laugh at him every chance I get.
• Date: 06/13/2009
• Tags: cant live without heartbreak

The cold heart that resides within me,
is a wintry abyss of black.
Nikki froze it solid with his icy smile.
He chopped and diced my poor bleeding heart
with every touch of his soft lips.
He condemned my soul with every sigh
he made me sigh he made me sigh
with his gentle fingertips as they traced my hips.
With every tear he made me cry
and every time I'd ask why
and every time I "failed to even try"
the more inside I would die.
Now I'm cold,
to you my soul was sold.
Well I stole it back
and I'll sew up every crack.
You used to sit
in a special place right next to my heart,
I'd hide in your arms
and be forever warm,
but from that place we've both been torn,
I've done more than just replace you but upgraded too,
and I laugh in your face
because now we BOTH know you thought wrong.
Now tell me once more,
exactly who can't live without who?


~Aimee 6/13/09~

Comments

[WorIds]

Thank you,Raindrop for all of your helpful comments,I'm glad you enjoy my poetry,and yes,that's one of my favorite lines in here too

[Taste of a Raindrop]

I'm not sure why people rated this poem so low. The imagery is very beautiful. I'm especially fond of "froze it solid with his icy smile". That, my dear, is a great line. It was the imagery that stood out to me. You have grammar errors though. Make sure you put commas in places where they need to go, and add the correct punctuation. I'm giving this four stars for its imagery.

P.S. I understand how you may feel, but laughing at your enemies is not the best thing for you. Trust me...