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She steps onto the stage.
Nervous but excited.
Her heels tap against the wood.
She walks to the microphone;
It stands ready.
Her eye studies the crowd.
She is now at ease.
Before a note is heard;
Her mouth opens to give a simple request.
"Listen to my song"
Comments (3 Comments)
- lillawyer - 06/18/2009
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kekek
Nice pic and the writing is kinda sad but i mean wtf i cant do betta then that - Report As Spam
- Bunai - 06/15/2009
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Thank you for the comment ^_^
This was more like a haiku set up (though obviously not a haiku). And I liked the use of "She" xd it was meant to stand out. - Report As Spam
- Arkelle - 06/15/2009
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Nice picture, nice concept.
I think it is pretty good!
If I were to offer any criticism I would say that pronouns in poetry (she, he, her his, names, ect) make the work seem unprofessional to me. Thats just my opinion though! Don't take it the wrong way!
Still, very nice. 4/5 - Report As Spam
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