Where We Can Stay..

• Artist: ElectraShocked
• Description: Even though we're seperated by sea's, we are closer than we have ever been.
• Date: 07/23/2009
• Tags: where stay

Together we will always be,
In my heart while you're at sea.
The waves cascading in my heart,
Eating sweats although they're tart.
I remember last July,
When you told me this forboding lie.
I glanced up longingly at the sky.
I wish that I could fly away,
And find a place where I could stay
Forever with you in my little cave,
Hidden away from society and demands,
We could stay forever holding hands.

Comments

[Zajas]

Short, sweet, and not tart at all, at least I thought so. smile
Quite well put together, one of the better or even best put together with a decent rhyming scheme. (I'm a sucker for those. ^^')

[Mentalpatient1288]

aw! i wish i was this good

[ElectraShocked]

Thanks, I'll make sure to check out some of your other poems Raypg. (:

[panada0746]

sounds like that i know someone. however, i really like it.

[Raypg]

When in the face of seperation, you experience life without your spouse, and, yes, you become closer. (: I like it! And thanks for commenting on my poems.

Did you read my other poems, or just that one?

[XxcarlehhxX]

awww its sad yet cute x3