alone

• Artist: what_the_rockerchick
• Description: i wrote this in a hard time in my life
• Date: 08/23/2010
• Tags: alone

alone.
she's all alone.
no one to love.
no one to be loved by.
she starts to cry.
she's alone.
unloved.....
abbandoned.......
help.
please help her.
help me.
help..........
she..........no.........me.
im.......im all alone.
save me........from the pain and aloness
help.....
im alone.
all alone......
alone.........
save me.......
alone........

Comments

[Eidolon Style]

Uh, it's not that good. Too many ...................................s.

It didn't have much emotion at all because there was very little content in your poem. Sure, you had this many lines, but it lacked power. I am not convinced that your character here needs help. Work on that next time! : D