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A hiku
Christmas is really fun!5-Slibils
Out there who cares about the sun?7-Silibils
Lets open some gifts!!!! 5-Slibils
- Title: A hiku
- Artist: Vectious
- Description: a Hiku
- Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: hiku
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Gregory Gibbens - 04/02/2009
- It's a beginner haiku at best, but I still rate: 4/5 for the dive; 2/5 for the landing. Average: 3/5
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- lois_griffin_92 - 01/28/2009
- agreed
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- idontcare92 - 12/26/2008
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*sigh* You fail to grasp several concepts.
First of all, a haiku (note the letter "a" wink is not merely a syllable (note the correct spelling) poem, it is meant to capture a moment in nature. Also, the word really is a two syllable word, as is the word Christmas, making your first line have six syllables, thus killing the syllable poem. All in all, I'd say 2/5. - Report As Spam
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