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Everyone now is quiet in bed,
But the night sky isn't sleeping,
Why is it still bright,
It's around a quarter to 9,
Where are the stars shining?
I go outside,
The stars are hiding,
The moon is dimmed,
No black sky lightings,
The sky is a gray,
White stars fall to Earth,
Cold and plesant,
So calming,
Around the time of December,
All things get ready to die,
All just because these little stars fall down,
But it isn't all that bad,
The sky is still singing,
All things seem to be so happy,
Animals see it as a time of peaceful sleeping,
As little children come and play,
Throwing the stars and laughing away,
Others see it as a time to cozy,
Around a fire to share stories with family,
All these stars aren't bad at all,
This is the time,
Of presents and giving,
For family and friends,
For laughter and smiles,
For caring and love,
New things come,
But rememeber the past,
A new beggining,
A new age,
A new year,
A new time,
So all I have to say,
To thank the creator of the white stars,
Thank you for family and friends,
And thank you for the snow,
Merry Christmas,
Happy New Year,
And may you and your family,
Have Happy Holidays too.
- Title: White Stars
- Artist: Rapturexz
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I just joined to see how good this poem is...
It took me a while to think of, but I think it's ok...
Be honest =D Vote please~~
(lawls this is my first time at this ^^" *sweat drops*) - Date: 12/13/2008
- Tags: holidays snow stars christmas newyears
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Comments (2 Comments)
- llXxSweet-Kanata_StarXxll - 06/03/2009
- I think it's lovely.The writting isn't important but what your though put into words is just astonishing full of amazement! Very Good job! *cries* 5/5
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- Starry Starry Fright - 12/26/2008
- You've got good ideas, but the way you present them is a bit...odd. Some lines of your poem rhyme, some almost rhyme and some don't rhyme at all - your bizarre rhyme scheme interrupts the flow of your work. Not bad for a first try, you have wonderful imagery, just keep working on the technical elements of your writing, okay?
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